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September 3rd, 2005


deeperpassion33
01:53 am
Hey, I'm torn on whether or not I like this. It's more meant to be spoken, if that helps. Any form of feedback would be greatly appreciated.

Love is blind
are the people
who are hoping to find
yourself a husband,
find yourself a rhyme
is important
when you're taking your time
is a healer
of unavoidable loss
of a vision
deprivation of a cause
for seclusion
well lets have a resolution
resolution of the cause
resolution of the loss
or better yet a revolution
where you still will take your time
and don't need to find a rhyme
because this crowd is the sublime
of grace in independency.

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August 6th, 2005


mego15
11:11 am
no really has been updating lately. i would post my poems now but im in florida and don't have them with me. but ive decided that if someone new wants to join they dont have to wait for me to give them a poem to critique they can just post saying there name, age, how long they have been writing poetry and post a sample of your work for others to critique. and feel free to critique your own poem as long as you want. Then they may start commenting all they want!

thanks
meaghan
p.s. does anyone have any good ideas for a contest on something we could do for the month?

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July 25th, 2005


billboard_dream
11:58 am - Hello all
Hello my name is Andy Sample. Im 13. I ve benn writing for about 3 or 4 years but have really gotten into poetry lately and am looking for more critique than my sister can offer. I tend to lean more towards abstract and out of the ordinary poems than those that can sound...angsty.

Thanks in advance for replies.
Current Mood: contentcontent
Current Music: The Five Tone Dragon- Jah Wobble

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May 24th, 2005


_windigo_
07:35 am - No one has posted in ages so i thought i would (even if i don't really like this work)
Lies

Cold, hard, glistening.
It's beautiful.

Crafted from the heart of the maker
finely decorated
with elborate exentricities.
The code imprinted apon it spells

Love?

Beautiful it may be
______________but impractical
__________________________useless
______________________________outdated

it still cuts
Deep.

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April 23rd, 2005


biting_bitch
10:58 pm - Hello...:)
My name is Lene and I am from Denmark. I am 20 years old and at the moment I am trying to write a novel. I also write poetry and short stories. I am really shy about my poetry because I don't like what I write. Most of my poetry is born in anger or in sorrow and I don't like that myself. But I still want to know what other people think about my work... If i should just forget averything about being a poet or if I should go on.. :)

Smiles from
lene

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April 7th, 2005


strangegoddess
12:39 pm
ok so here goes:)
slice me apart guys. its my favorite part of editing:)

the storm outside
The storm outside has blown drifts up to our windows.
Drafts creep in through invisible cracks
make us bundle up in wool
or fleece.
Blankets are piled up on the beds as we huddle on the couch.
The cold drives us closer together,
for security,
to stave off the lonely screaming wind.
We close our eyes and sigh.
Icy clouds of breath surrounding our heads
scald our lips.
In the warmth of day you smell like cold spring nights.
This bone chilling evening spas all your flavor.
I feel like you not even here.
You share no warmth with me tonight.
I want to suck on your mouth to make sure you're really with me.
That you still have taste.
So I will know your still beside me,
not some strange snow creature
sent to bleed the warmth from my blood.
Some frosty illusion.
My skin itches like paper,
flaking and peeling away under your hands.
And you blow away in snow.

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April 5th, 2005


deeperpassion33
08:33 pm
Come with me, I'll hold you close.
I'll build a home within my arms,
I'll keep your comfort near.
You don't have to do this, dear,
don't cry these crimson tears.
Stay strong for each other now,
we'll stand up with the sun.
Alone, the storms rage strong and fierce.
Together, rain clouds clear.
Let's sit beneath the stars and feel
the peaceful moon above.
We'll let ourselves slip far away,
kill our fears and sleep today.
We dream of sunsets yet to come:
glorious - strong in beauty.
Lying in our sweet embrace,
we'll never

fall

again.

Current Mood: goodgood

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April 4th, 2005


crimsoncrisis
05:28 pm
Hello.
:o)

I guess first, I'll follow the rules. I'm 17, and I've been writing for a few years I guess, but really only on and off when I'm in a certain 'mood' persay.

Anywase, I'm doing an english AP project, where we gotta write poems and such, and I have this one poem, I'm wondering if someone can tell me if it can be considered 'free verse'. Or, maybe it can be catagorized at something else? Thanks.

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March 29th, 2005


strangegoddess
06:14 pm
Hello everyone.
I'm Amanda and I'm 24. I've been writing since I was about 7(had a very supportive English teacher in junior high).
I'm a Visual Arts student for Newfoundland, Canada.
I'm looking forward to having a group outside of university to critique poetry with.
I'm graduating this year and will miss my creative writing classes.
hopefully I will be a good contributor to the group if you'll have me:)

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March 23rd, 2005


krictap
06:28 pm - The Stalker Within.
To live,
And miss,
And know for sure,
That the strange emotions I hold,
are safely kept in my mind which,
is consumed by a neverending hope,
Of a time to remember.

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